This week’s story was inspired by a dream I had once upon a time, and it was just such an interesting image I wanted to try tackling it a little. So here it is in five(ish) sentences! (I’ve chosen to combine the two dialogue sentences, since one is so short.)
Spooky. My only comment:is to replace “drew her” with “drew Amelia” and replace “only watch Amelia” with “only watch his daughter”. What do you think?
I do like that swap! It’s funny, because “only watch his daughter” was the first thing I had, but swapped it out–but I like your take better!